We critiqued an extract from a chapter by Linda. Annie enjoyed the 'gossipyness' of the story. The intrigue of what's-Lorna-doing-next. We all admired the sentence: "Phoebe in her scruffy coat and scraped shoes seemed somehow beautiful in the detail of insignificant things."
Rob struggled to keep track of the cast of characters. For him, the brevity of the scenes made it seem hurried and disjointed but he liked the phrase "eyes the colour of aniseed balls". I also found it a little hard to follow but loved the Dylan Thomas-esque language ("The girls ducked into the warmth of Divito's coffee shop, welcomed by the whirr of the coffee machines and the smell of bacon.") Linda has a knack for stimulating all the senses with tumbling phrases which are naturally rhythmic and alliterative.
And after that, in our rather chaotic way, we contrived to plan the next few meetings, as follows:
· Next meeting: Monday 25th April at Tony's (with Tony submitting)
· No meeting on Monday 9th May, due to low numbers
· Monday 23rd May at Jayne's (with Chris to submit) and
· Monday 13th June at Rob's (with Annie to submit.)